Lord Anzius

I read the preface and I liked it. Now this chapter... I don't know how to describe it. I just noticed things like you have friendly vampires, who heal people, ...

First I want to notify you that you are changing your tenses in this piece, and that annoys me and somehow confuses me a bit. For example: It was my ...

First.... More verse! With all due respect most pieces, mainstream or not normally have at least 3 verses, sometimes 2 but they repeat the first in the end to get ...

I will relate to Magnusbanefan13 on this one and ask: Why are they being bound to animals? Is this something like daemons from the golden compass or more from like ...

I'm not sure.. In Finland we don't get letters for grades we get numbers. 4, 5, 6, 7, 8, 9, 10 and we can get 5-, 6-, 7-, 8-, 9-, ...

Hi Tatra. Nice work, I like it I only have a few nit-picks: (1) Even after all of these years, the Guardian still didn’t know how Oberon managed to get ...

I'm not sure if it was meant to be that way but I found it a bit hard to read without quotation marks. I liked this story. I got sucked ...

Here as requested! :D Hi Palip! Every night, before falling asleep, he would take the photo from under the pillow and stare at it whilst always trying to fantasise what ...

:shock: That was..... Ummm. Disturbing. Well on to the point! The babysitter was exasperated, and she was only ( had been) there for two and a half hours so far. ...

over 30 "I":s in this piece and there were 34 or 35 lines. so at least one "I" for EVERY line.... a little less "I":s please, or else it shall ...

Woah... 5 A4.... You should cut this into shorter pieces. Here is the first half of my review the next part will be ready tomorrow. I woke up in stages. ...

Robert... There are thinks that you suck at... but writing songs is not one of them. You may not know how to play them, but you do know how to ...

Sorry that I didn't get on this earlier (Having a math test coming up sorry :oops: ) You asked me to help you in "CHARACTER DEVELOPMENT" so here goes: First. ...

...... I don't know what to say... It was... Beautiful. On with the review: ´ The punctuation is good, but. Get rid of all those brackets. Yes all of them. ...

Nice poem, but... It sounded like a song. Of course poems are, in a way, songs, but this sounded like a song. On with the review: They'll try to tell ...